写作思路
第一段：指明尽管一些人天生拥有好的家庭和具备良好的天赋，但是个人努力也至关重要。
第二段：用三个例子来具体说明成功需要付出巨大的努力。
第三段：天赋和努力一起造就成功。
范文及高分点评
Hard Work And Success
( 1 ) Some people hold the view that success is only for those with talent or who born in a good family, but I think talent or good family is not enough to be successful. At least, hard work is also a (2) vital factor. Hard work to success is like bricks to a building.
(3)To succeed in life, one first needs to set a goal and then gradually make it more practical. And in order to realize the goal, one must spend a large amount of time
studying and practicing. (4)We all know that Han Hong is a famous Chinese singer but what you may not know is that she spent hours every day practicing just in order to sing a song well enough. Sometimes she even missed her meals. Many people have such similar dreams but only a few people (5) have the drive to (6) pursue them diligently.
(7)To become great at certain things, you need to work (8) day in and day out. When you see people (9) exhibiting some great skills or having achieved great success, you know that they have put in a huge part o! their life as a dear cost for their success.
(1)开头表明自己的观点。用A to B is like C to D“A与B的关系就像C与D的关系”这个句型生动地说明了后天努力对于成功的关键性。
(2)vital意思为“关键的”。
(3)首先说明一般成功的大致过程，进而引出努力在成功过程中扮演的重要角色。
(4)用韩红的例子恰当地说明了努力与成功的关系。
(5)have the drive to do somethin9意思是“做某事的动力，有动力做某事”。
(6)pursue意思是“追求”。
(7)结尾再次强调成功是努力和付出的结果。首尾呼应。
(8)day in and day out意思是“天天，夜以继日”。
(9)exhibit的意思是“展示”。
闪光词汇
Vital    adj．关键的，重要的
Goal    n．目标：
Exhibit   v．展示
Day in and day out天天．夜以继日；
Factor  n．因素
Pursue   v．追求
Achieve  v．实现
万能句型
A to B is like C to DA相对于B，正如C相对于D
To be…in life．One must…在一生中要想……，就必须……
Some people hold the view that…but I think that…一些人持这样的观点……，但是我认为……
We all know that…but what we may not know is that…我们都知道……，但是我们可能不知道……